Comments for BirdWords

Comment on Preface of Theresa by alwaysmisunderstood

alwaysmisunderstood — Tue, 13 May 2008 15:33:14 +0000

Great start Alicia! U should totally continue this story! I can’t wait to read the rest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I noticed a few errors but not 2 many. Again, Gr8 story!

Comment on Preface of Theresa by Cathy

Cathy — Tue, 13 May 2008 15:29:30 +0000

Wow, what a dramatic story! Lots of darkness, intrigue and powerful images! I guess this is the story of a young French woman who becomes a vampire… which makes a very interesting storyline.

If she is going to travel in time and space (to Puyallup in America?) you might want to expand that aspect of the story so that your reader won’t be surprised when it happens…

What other super-natural powers are you giving Theresa and her vampires?

I’d suggest that you read your story out loud to yourself and catch sentences that don’t make sense, and take out words you don’t need. Make sure every sentence has a simple, easy-to-understand meaning. Because your plot is so super-natural, the language you use needs to be even more simple and direct, so that the reader can follow along easily and not get confused.

I look forward to reading the next chapter! Post it here, on BirdWords!

Comment on Sleepy Leopard by superstaractress011

superstaractress011 — Thu, 08 May 2008 15:28:35 +0000

Heyy, these photos are really cool! Where did you get them??? I really like this photo, and not just because cats rock! Again, gr8 photo!

Comment on where is the sidebar?? by Heidi

Heidi — Wed, 26 Mar 2008 04:21:33 +0000

yeah, I have noticed that. I don’t like it

Comment on SLUGS A Crazy Acrostic By Keri by peepootie

peepootie — Thu, 20 Mar 2008 03:28:38 +0000

i agree, and i too will have to hold the salt next time i see a slug anywhere nearby!

Comment on Summer: A Short Little Poem by Cathy

Cathy — Thu, 20 Mar 2008 02:59:05 +0000

I was leaning against one of the windows in the Odyssey hallway with the sun streaming in today at lunchtime and the warmth seemed to melt that place your poem speaks of inside of us, that holds on all winter, waiting. Thanks for giving voice to the beautiful changes that are happening as we exit winter… tomorrow is the first day of spring!

happy spring equinox!

Comment on Summer: A Short Little Poem by glamjunkie

glamjunkie — Thu, 20 Mar 2008 00:52:24 +0000

Beautiful. I want it so bad. (Summer, that is!)

Comment on SLUGS A Crazy Acrostic By Keri by Peggy Douglas

Peggy Douglas — Sun, 16 Mar 2008 14:26:26 +0000

Thank you! I now see slugs from a whole new viewpoint - I’ll hold the salt next time I see one in my garden, because they are SWEET!

Comment on Book Review: The Boy In The Striped Pajamas by ej6195

ej6195 — Sat, 15 Mar 2008 19:03:55 +0000

Wow Emma I need to read this book. I don’t usually like historical books, you know the books that take place during the Holocaust, WWI, WWII, etc. But anyways this was great, you writing is really easy to understand and insperational.

Comment on Slavery is Nothing by Luba

Luba — Thu, 13 Mar 2008 17:24:37 +0000

I love this poem!